AIM System Upgrade Notification
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AIM System Upgrade Notification
Dear UConn AiM User Community,
I am writing to let you know that this afternoon two automation enhancements will be released into the AiM Application. The first enhancement will change the status of a Work Order / Phase from “OPEN” to “ASSIGNED” if a shop person is assigned to that Phase. The second enhancement will APPROVE timecards that are more than 5 days old and have not been previously approved. The system is expected to remain on-line and operational during the installation of the enhancements.
- Please be aware that the first enhancement makes the change to the status after the supervisor clicks the Save button on the Phase and only if a shop person is assigned and only if the status is “OPEN”.
- The second enhancement is a scheduled process that will run once nightly and processing the 5 day old, unapproved timecards
There is no action necessary, however if you experience unexpected behavior following your standard work in the AiM Application please call the Operations Center at 6-3113 or reply to this email.
Thank you for your input that identified the need for these enhancements and your continued commitment to operational improvements and efficiencies. Please continue to provide your ideas for making AiM a better tool for Facilities Operations and Building Services.
Thank you,
George Perron
Lara Juenger